Before ya go and say she curses to d*mn much. YEAH I DO!!!! AND I EFFIN' PROUD OF IT TOO!!! Anyways I was reading stories as usual and I swear some peoples character info sucks soooooo much AS*SSS!!!! First of all your writing a story and the love interest is a normal human, so why the hell are there characters with super powers and being half vampire or half demon. I understand if it's a show or something like Yu Yu Hakusho or Bleach. Then the character can have some type or form of super powers. But when I'm reading fanfics about shows like Yu-Gi-Oh or Yu-Gi-Oh GX! or some other show that has nothing to do with super powers. I see these info's and you got the thing saying: your a vampire and its your first time at this school and blah blah blah. Or: Your this&this and your family is cursed to bear this&this. Then not only that the characters are sooooooooooo mary-sue. Have your characters have balls (Not in that sense ya disgusting F*cks) shoo!! I'm tired of reading crap saying that the character is always in trouble. Have her curse a little or something. I'm also tired of seeing the Emo shit happening! Not only that can ya stop basing the characters off of yaselves. That and having the best friend always being hyper. Sh*t. Do something different. Everything so d*mn cliche that it's dead. Ya say that ya have an imagination and really ya guys don't. Then the names. I've been reading fanfics about J-rock bands and stuff and you got the American girl or the European Girl. Seriously can it be someone of Japanese heritage as the character or a hispanic person. Now, I'm not saying that its racist or anything and I'm not trying to be racist but I'm tired of characters being white girls who are blond or brunette with blue eyes. Let it be a Dominican Girl or a Puerto Rican girl or a natural born asian. I'm tired of seeing brown hair or blond hair, blue eyes. NEWS FLASH PEOPLE:There are other hair and eye colors out there!!! Then we got the people who dye their hairs. I'm cool with that but if its there most of the time it just gets annoying. Then can you have the character at least not be a fan of the band. They're a foreigner...I barely have friends who are into the same bands as me because most of it is J-Rock or something. Bands in Japan might have alot of Fans in other countries but not as much as they're home country. Let them become a fan or something. Really though, don't do something cliche like they moved to Japan because they have family problems or they wanted to get away from an Ex. I get it if they always wanted to go there in order to see it and learn japanese for that purpose, but don''t make the reason stupid. And the spelling...OMG!!! Do not get me started on ya spelling. I'm not saying that ya can't write or something like that, but seriously make an effort to actually write and spell decently. I know ya do not write like that in school or college or in public period. In a text message thats okay but keep that sh*t to a minimum. No one wants to read a crappy story and I know as hell neither do you so don't write just as sh*tty. Its like the golden rule ya: Do unto others as you wish others do unto you. If you feel like writing a story then at least make it decent. Not only that, stop asking your friends for 5 stars when you know your work does not deserve that high of a rating. Ask for a honest rating. Shoot I'm not trying to be mean but ya gotta step it up. Write something worth reading, not some peace of sh*t story that has huge font but is less than 5 sentences. Also if you know you don't have the time to write don't write at all and wait another time when you have free time. I understand if it's like 3 chapters, but most of them. NO!!! Don't bother writing it if you really can't. It's not worth it. Wait until another time. I'm seriously not trying to be mean and apologize in advance if ya offended, but seriously step it up. There's alot of potential, but if ya don't use it, don't bother writing anything. It's just a waste of time. And before ya get mad at me, THIS IS THE TRUTH!!! Nobody said the truth don't hurt. I'm just being real and pointing out all the things that really destroys the story.